tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6209068.post110519357047771106..comments2023-11-02T13:02:02.590+05:30Comments on Basket Case: Ek Ghazalabhagahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02584059046263945740noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6209068.post-1105628294116002522005-01-13T20:28:00.000+05:302005-01-13T20:28:00.000+05:30Now that I see abhaga is going to be famous soon, ...Now that I see abhaga is going to be famous soon, let me tell you a few things --<br /><br />I dont find in this, the beauty which I have spotted earlier. It seems you are too fascinated with patterns and formats. Vicharon ko chhandon mein uljhakar swachchhandta se viheen kar diya hai.<br /><br />See abhaga, you are trying to defy here, the very evolution cycle of a poet. You are new to poetry. And remember, youth is about freedom. You should explore this freedom and then, after maturing through it, you should let the formats guide your ideas. If you hurry into patterns, you dont reach those depths as the patterns dont guide you. They start restricting your thoughts. That is the last thing a poet should do. To contain is to kill Abhaya.<br /><br />And tell you something more important, wehn you follow the pattern of a proper Ghazal, the key lies in the lines being repeated. Those lines should be multi-faceted and sharp as a razor's edge. See this --<br />Dil ke lutne ka sabab poochho na sabke saamne<br />Naam ayega tumhara, 'woh kahani fir sahi'!<br /><br />I am not looking down upon your effort. On the contrary, I love it. But I believe you would do better to explore more before you get into proper ghazals.<br /><br />Just a thought!<br />AkshayaBravehearthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05308475620546610952noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6209068.post-1105608846889086132005-01-13T15:04:00.000+05:302005-01-13T15:04:00.000+05:30Haan to bhei sawaal simple sa hai ... yeh shab-e-t...Haan to bhei sawaal simple sa hai ... yeh shab-e-taar type ki urdu tum seekhe kaha se ho??Priyendrahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05013749599073853302noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6209068.post-1105608792303100052005-01-13T15:03:00.000+05:302005-01-13T15:03:00.000+05:30This comment has been removed by a blog administrator.Priyendrahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05013749599073853302noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6209068.post-1105608007432551252005-01-13T14:50:00.000+05:302005-01-13T14:50:00.000+05:30piyali:
ke likha jab bhi humne kuch, tera salaam m...piyali:<br />ke likha jab bhi humne kuch, tera salaam mila,<br />mila sabhi se hume, bas tera na pyaar mila. :)abhagahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02584059046263945740noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6209068.post-1105519865716782742005-01-12T14:21:00.000+05:302005-01-12T14:21:00.000+05:30On the first comment: Didn't someone say "Guru gud...On the first comment: Didn't someone say "Guru gud, chela cheenee" :-DJayahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09739951508347074067noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6209068.post-1105431934462698472005-01-11T13:55:00.000+05:302005-01-11T13:55:00.000+05:30Wah bhai wah. Nice blog, Wish your blog will appea...Wah bhai wah. Nice blog, Wish your blog will appear in Devnagri Hindi too in near future to spread it's full essence, which it deserves.Prem Piyushhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04751075880833019986noreply@blogger.com